"Rocketjump" track developement

I'm starting a separate thread to not bloat MirceaKitsune's thread, where this discussion started (thanks to aa for giving me detailed feedback, so I can improve this track).

Here's OLD version 10 (looped for Xonotic):
http://unfamusic.com/5h1+/unfa-RocketJump.ogg Vorbis
https://soundcloud.com/unfa/rocket-jump Same on Soundcloud

Here's NEW version A03 (looped for Xonotic):
http://unfamusic.com/5h1+/unfa-RocketJump-A03.flac 16-bit FLAC
http://unfamusic.com/5h1+/unfa-RocketJump-A03.ogg Vorbis, quality 4
http://unfamusic.com/5h1+/unfa-RocketJump-A03.mmpz Source for LMMS 1.0.0

I marked it with A to start numbers from 1 as it's a major change (like from 1.0 to 2.0).

Changes between 10 and A03:

- tempo raised from 133 to 144 BPM (150 felt too fast, and unnatural);
- bass and bassdrum quiter in the mix;
- new lead and support instruments;
- new FX instruments: explosion, raise FX, wind noise FX;
- more melodies;
- more textures (quiet rhytmical lines to fill the mix and add some tension;
- a few drumline enhancements (random extra hits here and there to make it more lively);
- an extra segment starting at 6:13 to break the boredom of all the same patterns repeating over and over;

Yes, i feel the improvement in the pace.

At the 0.41 there is a nice development, particularly with the high sounds, but it could use more expressed low and bass sound.

2:18 there is a good rinsing sensation, i think you could further make it stand out more, make it stronger, make it into a major theme, repeated throughout the track.

the sound at 3.28... err i guess it could be more explosive, and maybe have a echo, it could sound something like what follows the fraze "Not the end" in your song Not The End.

3:40 the noise is too much there, could be decreased.

4.25 these salvos could last longer and have quiter main beats in between them.

4:55 here the notes are too spaced out, you could add extra things in between them, but minor

The big change at 6:15 is good, but the change within it could happen faster,.
The echo could be more noticable
6:27 this one is good! I think in might be a good idea to add a group of such strikes.
this section i think is too reoeating in general, It si good, but when it goes on for over a minute without changes, it gets...

6:45 nice wind effect.

I guess it could use some more crashing like in 6:27, and some turnarounds like the ones you could hear in "Not The End". That one i think is really good, and could be made into a very successful track for xonotic. Or you might use some motives from it in Rocket jump.



Here is my 2 cent.

PS the name doesn't actually fit it too well.